Friday, November 8, 2019
Elevator Pitch No. 3 - 22A
1) The pitch: https://youtu.be/l5JjNU4l7SE
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch. Describe what stood out to you as important, what feedback surprised you the most, what feedback you think was outright wrong or silly or amazing and inciteful.
Based on the feedback I received, it was mentioned I sounded more comfortable and laid back this time around. The speed and tone of my voice were also good, which made me appear more confident and get my message across. I was told that my hands were a little distracting, though, which I wasn't aware I was doing. I also need to emphasize the problem a bit more, so that the solution seems more appealing.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
I took the feedback from all three comments and improved my pitch from the last one. I made sure to only use my hands when needed and talked more about the problem in a way that it's more relatable so people can have the urgency or desire for the solution, which in my case is the gym concept.
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Hey Fiorella,
ReplyDeleteGreat pitch. I stated a few tips last time and I think you did a much better job this time around. You were relaxed, but still passionate about the issue. Also, your hands weren't very distracting, and you only used them for meaningful gestures. I think your idea was conveyed much more effectively this time around. Great job.
Hi,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your pitch! I think this was definitely the best one! I liked your tone of voice and the speed at which you went at. It was really easy to understand what your pitch was about. I liked your hand gestures as it emphasized certain important points. Keep up the great work!
Hi Fiorella,
ReplyDeleteThis pitch is very well done. Its content is perfectly in logical order and neatly selected to cover the essential aspects of your business idea. Secondly, your tone is in a extent that is able to draw attention from your audiences while clearly expressing your thoughts.
Hi Fiorella,
ReplyDeleteI like how you had an attention grabber that attempts to relate to the audience. This pitch was more conversational, which shows how comfortable you are with your idea and in presenting it to others. You did a great job taking the feedback from others to create an overall great elevator pitch. You said that you changed your pitch to be more relatable to the audience and I think that you did just that! Like I mentioned, the attention grabber and the conversational tone of the pitch were great in relating and resonating with the audience!